Hi Candice, I'm going to comment today about using 'prepositions' in your writing; these are the little words that join various bits of a sentence together. I will give you a couple of examples from your writing above - You have written, 'According Fowkes have written the trend of fantasy story and it is noticeable the progression of the story line if comparing with King Kong, the character in these two film both have the beauty and the beast while it transform from fear to love.' So this is how it would look with some prepositions inserted (I have put them in capital letters so you can spot them!) 'According TO Fowkes, Cocteau has written the trend of fantasy story and it is noticeable IN the progression of the story line if comparing with King Kong, the character in these two film both have the beauty and the beast while it transform from fear to love.'
There is a useful guide on what a preposition is here - http://www.writingcentre.uottawa.ca/hypergrammar/preposit.html
Make sure that when you are mentioning the film names, you put the main words in the title with capital letters, so 'Beauty and the Beast', not Beauty and the beast' etc.
Check out the referencing guide again, for what needs to be in the image list at the end - you need details such as if it is a film still, the directors name, studio etc. Also, your book bibliography needs a little tweak - firstly make sure you spell the author's name right! It is different in the bibliography to your reference in the text.... The authors surname comes first, followed by their initial. You then need to check out which bits need to be in italics. Within the text, if you are quoting from a book, you put the page number like this (Fowkes,2010:25)
...also I have just noticed you have called the filmmaker 'De. Jean Cocteau' - the 'De' is actually not part of his name, that is French for 'of' or 'by', so it is 'the film of or by Jean Cocteau' :)
Hi Candice,
ReplyDeleteI'm going to comment today about using 'prepositions' in your writing; these are the little words that join various bits of a sentence together. I will give you a couple of examples from your writing above -
You have written,
'According Fowkes have written the trend of fantasy story and it is noticeable the progression of the story line if comparing with King Kong, the character in these two film both have the beauty and the beast while it transform from fear to love.'
So this is how it would look with some prepositions inserted (I have put them in capital letters so you can spot them!)
'According TO Fowkes, Cocteau has written the trend of fantasy story and it is noticeable IN the progression of the story line if comparing with King Kong, the character in these two film both have the beauty and the beast while it transform from fear to love.'
There is a useful guide on what a preposition is here -
http://www.writingcentre.uottawa.ca/hypergrammar/preposit.html
Make sure that when you are mentioning the film names, you put the main words in the title with capital letters, so 'Beauty and the Beast', not Beauty and the beast' etc.
Check out the referencing guide again, for what needs to be in the image list at the end - you need details such as if it is a film still, the directors name, studio etc.
Also, your book bibliography needs a little tweak - firstly make sure you spell the author's name right! It is different in the bibliography to your reference in the text....
The authors surname comes first, followed by their initial. You then need to check out which bits need to be in italics.
Within the text, if you are quoting from a book, you put the page number like this (Fowkes,2010:25)
...also I have just noticed you have called the filmmaker 'De. Jean Cocteau' - the 'De' is actually not part of his name, that is French for 'of' or 'by', so it is 'the film of or by Jean Cocteau' :)
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